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listen:

fall makes me think of leaving and of apple cider, though i never liked apple cider.
but i liked the idea of it.


listen:

two years ago i met a boy as fragile as dead leaves who called me his little spring girl. (i'd always liked autumn the best.) he kissed the two soft dimples on the small of my back and told me helikedme helovedme hewantedme.

and oh, by the way, "everything good must come to an end."


listen:

on our one year anniversary we picked out two pumpkins and i drew elephants on them for us to carve. he cut his out so aggressively that it lost its shape.
lopped off tusks and broken trunks became just a large, jagged hole.

he put a lit candle inside, and we watched it flicker, illuminating the raw edges.

"what is it supposed to be?" i asked him, taking his hand.

"my heart," he said definitively.
like an afterthought.

after that i was too afraid to carve my pumpkin at all.


listen:

the leaves changed, or maybe he changed, or maybe i was brave enough to carve that fucking elephant on a faded pumpkin, weeks too late for halloween. (i screwed it up anyway, the elephant had three legs.)
maybe if he hadn't loved apple cider so much, if he had let the piercing in his lip close up, or if he hadn't cracked between my fingers like dead leaves, he would still be holding my hand.

but somehow i don't think so.
his hands are now too busy holding cigarettes. holding court orders. letting go.


listen:

he left a gallon of apple cider in my fridge. maybe it is still there.


listen:

i kept my ruined pumpkin beneath my desk for a week and propped my feet up on it, but i could never bear to put a lit candle inside.

there was just something entirely too hopeful about watching broken things glow.
más se perdió en cuba.

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Given 2008-11-30
stop ruining autumn. by *estallidos is an exciting prose poem with some beautiful lines. ( Suggested by popsicle-culture and Featured by lovetodeviate )
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EchoeNyx Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014
smh...since the first day i read it 6yrs ago...a masterpiece, and still is. beautiful. 
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Bros-Key Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You really find it incredibly hard to disappoint me with your literature, don't you? It just keeps getting better.
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:iconme00ws:
me00ws Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
"two years ago i met a boy as fragile as dead leaves"

So beautiful!!
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:iconcalf2808:
calf2808 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
nice work.
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:iconlifeisfiction:
LifeIsFiction Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
"There is just something entirely too hopeful about watching broken things glow." What a perfect statement.
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:iconrusselinpurple:
Russelinpurple Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
I´m speechless, awesome :)
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Gamzeemakarahonk12 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
Awesome. nothing else 2 be said.
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:iconpinkispractical:
PinkisPractical Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Student General Artist
woah! :O Insta-watch and fave!
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:icondo-they-collide:
do-they-collide Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your poetry is just incredibly stunning.
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
[link] :blowkiss: Included in this feature celebrating colors.
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:iconjm-roe:
JM-Roe Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Holy freaking shit that is some powerful stuff *_* brilliant wording! You are absolutely fantastic. I'm praising this like it's my god right now..
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Drydell-da-Vinci Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I just admire the last sentence :D
Beautiful words were said here in this piece :)
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:iconalika-n:
alika-n Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice one! :-) I really like this line: "and oh, by the way, 'everything good must [...]' " The title is good, too! :-)
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Professional Writer
thanks!
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:iconwarriorscomeback:
WarriorsComeBack Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
wow *.* thats so romantic beauty and sad in once... does that really happens? I m so sorry for you that it end so shit
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:iconzorlia:
Zorlia Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
beautiful
makes me sad but,
beautiful
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
then i have accomplished my goal.
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:iconteratabitha:
teratabitha Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is great, I write but this is way better than anything I have ever seen or done...
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Writer
oh wow, thank you for your kind words!
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:iconteratabitha:
teratabitha Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
not a problem. it is really great.
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:iconcrocutacorvid:
crocutacorvid Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow. absolutely gorgeous. everything about this.
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:iconlilphotographer:
lilphotographer Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
Oh god. This is beautiful, so amazing. I am officially a fan. There are many beautiful lines, I hope you never stop writing.
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Professional Writer
i'm really honored that you're taking the time to read some of my work and say such nice things. please know that it's appreciated <3
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planetarySwordsman Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
See, it's things like this that inspire me.
That restore my faith in humanity.
That get me to give enough fucks to actually press the shift key once in a while.
Because sometimes I think that people don't see the beauty in words, the beauty that carries over into real life.
Sometimes, I realise abruptly that the word gives exactly zero shits about me.
So I turn to the little things, like faded, half-forgotten whispers of memories.
And things like this.
Your work puts ideas in my mind, makes me want to fill thirty three notebooks with poetry and prose and ideas.
So I'll keep coming back, again and again, until those thirty three notebooks are no longer blank.
And everyone will know it was your fault, they'll be able to see your writing in my own.
Because truly great authors always show, they turn every amateur out there into their own personal looking glass, and unintentionally broadcast themselves to every corner of this godforsaken sphere that we call Earth.
Thank you, for inspiring me, for making me feel alive.
Thank you.
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estallidos Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Professional Writer
this is perhaps the prettiest comment i have ever gotten. and i mean that.

in fact, it's pretty hard to think of an appropriate response without sounding trite or like some dim echo. so i hope a thank you in return will suffice.

i hope you fill those thirty three notebooks.
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DasWolfKind Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
danfjakdhfiuoeqnfiaufnija

I love your work.
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Professional Writer
i'm so glad that you've enjoyed what you've read! thank you for the compliments and the favorites :)
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:iconaninfinitygame:
aninfinitygame Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Student Writer
i love this.
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:iconthree-amigos:
Three-Amigos Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is the most beautiful thing - your writing is marvelous and so puncturingly real. Thank you for sharing your words with the world. I'm going to buy your book.
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Professional Writer
wow, thank you so much! i really appreciate you taking the time to read some of my work and say such nice things. <3
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:iconthree-amigos:
Three-Amigos Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really appreciate you existing. <3
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sapphiredragonfly Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
I had a boy like that once.
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Professional Writer
unfortunately the best part about boys like that is their poetry potential.
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MojoDearDiary Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Professional Writer
i'm glad you like it :)
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:iconcrimzonrose:
CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012   Writer
You have been featured here *CrimzonRose
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:iconcrimzonrose:
CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012   Writer
:iconbigheartplz: your writing, your thoughts are amazing, touching, heartbreaking.. .and this piece has caused me to read more. :clap:
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:iconestallidos:
estallidos Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Professional Writer
well thank you so much for taking the time to read, to comment, to watch...all of the support is wonderful. i really appreciate it!
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:iconcrimzonrose:
CrimzonRose Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012   Writer
you're very, very welcome!
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:iconpurplebooklover:
PurpleBookLover Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011
I don't know what to say except yeah. Good job. Good ending. Stop making me sad, but actually do because it's in a good way. Maybe I'm a masochist.
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:iconzelendia:
Zelendia Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
It made me shiver. Loved it.
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:iconralenore:
Ralenore Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Student General Artist
Beautiful.
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011
The second one is breathtaking. Just... grips you around your neck, like the silence after a gunshot, or something like that.
Thank you.
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:icon2-minutes-behindxx:
2-Minutes-BehindxX Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
THE LAST LINE GETS ME EVERYTIME~
GOOD WORK. : )
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
"two years ago i met a boy as fragile as dead leaves"
I met one 4 months ago, and he didn't break yet.
The cigarettes and razors on his hands disappeared since he met me.
But he never had the poetic idea of calling me spring, instead, he calls me love.

I think I love you, I fell in love with your poetry. $:
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:iconilikeskarfs:
ILikeSkarfs Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2011
Your writing is like crack!!!
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:iconlondonrey:
londonrey Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011
that last line really makes this for me.
your insides are beautiful.
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:iconsarah-the-writer:
Sarah-the-writer Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011
I totally agree. LOVE the last line.
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:iconlondonrey:
londonrey Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2011
<333
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